Nah dude it's pretty awesome, especially the chorus. Could flow a little better in parts but that's about it. Also what genre would it be, cos how good it is depends on how you sing it. I sung it in my head in a sorta rap.
Actually I wrote the whole thing in about 15 mins.. So I know some parts need improvment, I spent the most time on the chrous, glad you noticed that. <3 Thanks a lot.
And actually this one, I was thinking it would be either metal/rock.. or something like linkin park.. a mix.
Now I shall keep my word, and post another one.. On the main post though ^^