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« on: December 30, 2010, 02:54:09 pm »

Well, for no good reason other than boredeom and wanting feed back.. I decided to post some of the stuff I write, which hopefully could be turned into music someday. This is my latest one I wrote today, I have no idea what its suppose to mean, but meh. There are much better efforts ill post later. Enjoy.

P.S. Radyation is a nickname I aquired.. combining my name "Rady" and Radiation. C wat I did dere?

Paradox Of Spartcus

Welcome friend, to a virtual world of our creation
See through houses, unfaithful spouses
Broken rules, and never used tools of liberation
A lion's heart in a rat's incarnation
Clocks that won't stop or begin
A dirty motivation of evil under my skin


An unmovable object meets an unstoppable force
An immortal heart on an inescapable course
Vicinity of obscenity in your eyes
Its telling the truth, but your mouth's full of lies
Dividing by zero inside my brain, 
Stopping with my dick a full moving train
Paradox of Spartacus, you fight to get out of sin
But once you're out, you would die to get back in

 
Once I saw the moon light, in your soul
Once it was tainted and out of control
I Stole the sun, from the middle of the sky
Hid it in your seat, made you sit and die
Found a way, to slow each and every day
Now I have nothing to say, you're just being gay

An unmovable object meets an unstoppable force
An immortal heart on an inescapable course
Vicinity of obscenity in your eyes
Its telling the truth, but your mouth's full of lies
Dividing by zero inside my brain, 
Stopping with my dick a full moving train
Paradox of Spartacus, you fight to get out of sin
But once you're out, you would die to get back in


A logical way of contradicting reality
A lame way of defying mortality
If you could only see, how my mind's torn
Don't fight anymore, never mourn
You were dead, since you were ever born

An unmovable object meets an unstoppable force
An immortal heart on an inescapable course
Vicinity of obscenity in your eyes
Its telling the truth, but your mouth's full of lies
Dividing by zero inside my brain, 
Stopping with my dick a full moving train
Paradox of Spartacus, you fight to get out of sin
But once you're out, you would die to get back in



P.S. I realize it sucks.


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Home Sweet Home

Well you know what they say,
Home is where your heart shall lay
A place to feel loved through the day
And tears are free to go as they may
Cuz u know someone will wipe them away

It's like you're a place where I belong
A place where finally pain is wrong
I was everywhere and felt alone
Alone away in a big shaded dome
But now, I have a grin on my face ear to ear
You own my soul and its right here
Youíre my home sweet home


Now that I'm where I'm suppose to be, it's all a rush
Ice built up on my emotions crack, what a crush
Your hands are the only thing I was meant to touch
Cuz I can see a night full of stars right in your eyes
And I can hear angels scream your name through the skies
It's like a new smile every time I turn around
It's like the sight of you makes roses grow from the ground

It's like you're a place where I belong
A place where finally pain is wrong
I was everywhere and felt alone
Alone away in a big shaded dome
But now, I have a grin on my face ear to ear
You own my soul and its right here
Youíre my home sweet home


Even though it seems I was in hell and back
Broken hearts, shattered dreams and souls off its track
A Funeral for love, everyone's dressed in black
Gasping for air, tired of screaming through the night
Your eyes are burning from seeing her face in every light
Love's a war. And I'd never win that fight
But we're finally home, my heart can rest tonight.

It's like you're a place where I belong
A place where finally pain is wrong
I was everywhere and felt alone
Alone away in a big shaded dome
But now, I have a grin on my face ear to ear
You own my soul and its right here
Youíre my home sweet home



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Roadkill

I was runnin at the speed of sound
Couldn't see anything around me
Something bad was bound
All I was thinking of getting to you
No matter what speed I had to do
Everything was such a blur
Where I was headin I wasn't sure

But Now I feel like I got run by a car
What I wanted, was here, not far
Now I can see my blood splatter
Can hear the echo of my bones just shatter
A Rain of tears on my body shall shower
Can't help it, but just stay still
You got me feeling like I'm Road kill


Stop looking for a heartbreak cure
What you wanted of me, im not sure
I tried my best, my intentions were simply pure
It seems its never enough
Didn't know things would get this tough
Dying piece by piece bit by bit..
But in the end it was worth all I did.

But Now I feel like I got run by a car
What I wanted, was here, not far
Now I can see my blood splatter
Can hear the echo of my bones just shatter
A Rain of tears on my body shall shower
Can't help it, but just stay still
You got me feeling like I'm Road kill


And In the end, I crashed into you by surprise
My heart went up in flames when I Saw you eyes
Sparks flied, as I went up in roaring fire
My flame running on fuel of my own desire
It could've been my last breath
Don't care if it was even my death
It was all worth it, as I burn in my flame
Lighting up the sky, with your name

But Now I feel like I got run by a car
What I wanted, was here, not far
Now I can see my blood splatter
Can hear the echo of my bones just shatter
A Rain of tears on my body shall shower
Can't help it, but just stay still
You got me feeling like I'm Road kill
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« Reply #1 on: December 30, 2010, 04:27:10 pm »

Nah dude it's pretty awesome, especially the chorus. Could flow a little better in parts but that's about it. Also what genre would it be, cos how good it is depends on how you sing it. I sung it in my head in a sorta rap.
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« Reply #2 on: December 30, 2010, 06:08:53 pm »

Nah dude it's pretty awesome, especially the chorus. Could flow a little better in parts but that's about it. Also what genre would it be, cos how good it is depends on how you sing it. I sung it in my head in a sorta rap.

Actually I wrote the whole thing in about 15 mins.. So I know some parts need improvment, I spent the most time on the chrous, glad you noticed that. <3 Thanks a lot.

And actually this one, I was thinking it would be either metal/rock.. or something like linkin park.. a mix.

Now I shall keep my word, and post another one.. On the main post though ^^
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« Reply #3 on: December 30, 2010, 07:46:47 pm »

I read the first one as a rap too until you told me. Then I tried to take it as a linkin park style but I was listening to other music so it was hard. I guess for a 15 min song it's pretty good. Like I said before the last verse seems like it lacks something. The first lines of the chorus got some Eminem song in my head though.

I'll read the other ones later, I'm kinda not in a musical mind set and can't seem to keep concentrated on them
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« Reply #4 on: December 30, 2010, 07:50:33 pm »

The others are pretty sweet but I prefer the first one.
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« Reply #5 on: January 08, 2011, 07:16:12 am »

Thoughts of a Sleepy Husband

Long days pass, and the body and mind grow weary of life. He lies in his bed, next to his beloved, watching her sleep. Monitoring her every move and every breath she takes and wonders to himself: Is it really possible that my heart grows fonder of you with each beat it takes? Every time I blink and open my eyes again, you grow more beautiful. Itís a breath taking feeling, time goes slower, your heart beat slow down to enjoy the moment it has been seeking for so long. You fear that between its beats, it might not beat again from the weight of such love upon it. But that is the beauty of love.

As he gently plays with her hair and brushes his nose against hers, he thinks "What is it about you?" "Why does the mere mention of your name make the very essence of my soul tremble in passion" What can this divine feeling and heavenly creature lying before me be? A thought occurs in my mind, "People always say, God's beauty and the greatness he has put in his creations is endless". The word endless is so unlimited; a human mind cannot understand it. I cannot sit here and lie and say your beauty is endless, as my sight and knowledge lack what's needed to make such a statement. But I  have to say, in all my life, spending years, seeing, thinking and trying to relate things to each other, I never knew that endless could be this far. That may make no sense, but its simply my way of saying, that I have never seen anything more beautiful than you, and the sight of you has set a completely new meaning of beauty in my heart.

"What a gruesome world we live in" he thinks to himself. It is such a horrible world, it makes you very much want to give up, give in to the bitterness of hate and anger. But how can I give up? How can I surrender when something like you exists? Itís simply the world against me and you. And you win each and every time. Because the taste of your lips is a cure to the acidic burning taste of bitterness left on my tongue by spending time in the world away from you.

He smiles and looks down and thinks "Why am I bothering my mind, when I should be simply enjoying the moment?" I do not need to think about her beauty or soul, when I feel it within me in every touch. He lays his cheek against hers, she wakes up and smiles a big shiny grin towards him, and they start to talk. He tells her his thoughts of her, and she blushes and says "I am sure I am not all that, I mean you must look at other women as well? Itís the nature of men".

"Oh quite certainly I do" he says with a smirk. She almost shrugs and slides her head from under him when he says "I look at other women all the time; it is in the nature of a man. But after looking and looking, it is now a fact to me, that every other woman in this world was created to show me, that you're simply better than them, living proof of my heavenly gift from God.

He turns on his back, and lets her rest her head on his chest as she falls back to sleep with a smile on her face. He places his hands behind him to support his head, and continues to watch her sleep. He feels so much comfort in this; he does not wish to fall asleep. But as his eyelids feel heavy and the light fades away from her image in front of him, he can only hope inside his heart, that he sees her in his dreams.

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P.S. I realize it is not a song, and may be more fitting in the fanfiction part. Its just a short story, and didn't wanna bother posting a fanfiction thing for it, cuz its short. Plus IT IS a type of Art..
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« Reply #6 on: January 11, 2011, 08:19:22 pm »

Really nice.
Cheesy

I can fit those songs in a Linkin Park type of song in my head. But yeah, they seem to fit better as a rap. As for Metal/rock, yeah I can fit them in like that as well.

Sorry if my critique is blaaaahhhhh I'm sooo tired. -.-

I admire anyone with song writing skill. I fancy myself a decent writer, when I actually get off my ass and do it, but that's for stories, I could never write a song. If I tried, it'd come out so dumb. :0

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